Published December 5, 2009
One mistake
That's all it takes
My world turns upside down
As I fall to the ground
I did not do those things
Yet you accuse me falsely
You are the puppeteer pulling my heartstrings
Believing your one and only theory
I lied to you before
But this time I mean exactly what I say
As the ash floats down beside me
Your anger, the fire burning in front of my face
You don't believe me
Saying my lies are a disgrace
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i liked your poem a lot it gives out of emotion
tells a story about what you feel
great job keep writin
i liked that poem. i agree with the one above me. (forgot the name) but this was really good. I liked that line about the anger being a fire in front of your face. That was really good imagery. It drew me in too
I do not see anything wrong with it. Good job! ^_^
Most of the times it only takes one great line for me to love a poem, one line that leaves me breathless.
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You had that one line
That one just got me and made me read your poem with even more concentration.
This one also really touched me:
Good work, girl! Love to read more from you.